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I have a line of games in the Quip universe I want to create. As far as crowdfunding goes, I thought it might make sense to start out small and then one by one launch bigger projects.

For the first step in that, yesterday I launched the kickstarter for a:
"Fast paced 2D obstacle avoidance game of physics-based action requiring a quick navigating mind and nimble fingers."
https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/me ... ip-anomaly

Other than the glaring lack of video which I hope to rectify soon, what should I change? I would welcome any feedback and suggestions for the campaign page. The funding goal is only $250 so I didn't go crazy on it. Just tried to explain the project and some context for it. But I'm not confident I took the right approach. It's hard for me to understand how the backer would view this.

Hi there. Hmm no video, no images and..no backers ;( I think you need to look at your competitors and base your page on what they did. Perhaps restart it again

You mean no images like concept art or game play explanation images?

For the video--do I have to have a prototype footage to display? Or can I just describe the concept in some way in the video and that's sufficient? Or do I just need some video that engages and doesn't need to explain the game play at all?

Don't need to restart, I can try to add the things needed.

As for competitors, at this low of funding goal, there are projects that have done even less than what I have already and gotten funding, so it's hard for me to tell from that what is important and what isn't for the campaign page.

I have added a video and a concept art image for the main character now. Are there other images you would want to see on there? Or again, in general, other suggestions?

Hi. I'd approach it like this : If I'm visiting your page and don't read the text or watch the video > would I be able to tell what sort of project you're looking to fund?

At a glance (which is what people do, esp on mobiles) the page looks like it's something to do with space.

I wouldn't connect it with a mobile game until I read about it. There's no screenshots or anything to engage me as a potential bacjer. I'd suggest drawings, layouts, information about who's working on the project, a bullet point list as to what the game can do and so on...

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Thanks again for the feedback so far. I have rewritten a number of things based on feedback I have received. The primary one left is making it more clear exactly how the game is played, so I'll work on doing that both in the new video I put up there and in the text.

Hi there!

A few critiques on the video:

The speech modulation is difficult to understand,

You talk briefly about the controls, but the video itself seems to just show some objects knocking into one another. I recognize this is an early alpha stage prototype, but as a viewer it's unclear to me from this clip and your explination below what I as the player would do in the game, or how I would control it.

Also, the video ends rather abruptly. The first time I viewed it, I thought it was simply buffering and would continue in a moment and feels very raw and unfinished.

Best of luck to you on your campaign!
-Curtiss

Looks cool, good luck!

Thanks again everyone who has contributed so far. I have made changes based on the feedback I have received, and I have uploaded a new video this morning that is much better. It's nice to have real in-game footage to use.

One of the big feedback was explaining the game play. I have tried to do that in both the video and in the text of the campaign page. I welcome any and all feedback always, of course.